Feel me roar in the avenues of the sun.
Feel my power, equal to fucking none.
Feel your legs, they quiver as you are undone,
by my teeth, my lips, my breasts, and my tongue.
Feel as your heart pounds like a machine gun.
Feel my hands around your throat, one by one.
Feel the empty shadows flee, for I’ve won!
Feel your body shaken, riddled, and spun.
Feel daggers of my hands and feet, have your fun.
Feel the silk of my hair, I know, you’re stunned.
Feel the edge of my knives evade your lungs,
Feel impossible lightning that has sprung.
Feel, the tones of my heart, for you have sung,
Feel the edges of sanity fully wrung,
Feel the moments of ecstasy fully flung,
Feel your sweating body, I’ve just begun.
it is so sensual,
but yet excellent words
Still felt this one hours after I turned off my computer. Gorgeous.
I think I’m going to try writing drunk.
You should! Your writing is amazing sober, though. (sober?)
The Goddess-Princes incarnates in many ways, and the paths are forged into roses of steel, great poem, I salute you ! 🙂
Lovely thoughts, thank you so very much.
You used very powerful words; it’s an excellent poem. 🙂
thank you so much.
you’re welcome. 🙂
Very…tangible… 😉
Should “evade” be “invade?” — or did you mean it like that?
Not going to lie, I was drunk as anything when I wrote this…I would change only about eighty-seven thousand things if I weren’t enjoying the blatant mistakes abounding…
Sacrilege! Change nothing, it’s flawless and raw.
I won’t, and yes, raw is the word. Imprecise, maybe.
Momma said knock you out!
lol
Fem Dom
raar.
Eeeek!
Ha!
Whew! Feel like a voyeur whose eyes have been stung. And all with a single predicate and rhyme scheme – amazing.
Haha, thank you.
Spine thrilling! This reminds me of Michael Moorcock’s fight scenes.
Wow, thank you.
All thumbs up!
Indeed ; ) Thanks!
In sane
I like the space.
It so wonderfully raw (as it should be) . Anyway if this just the beginning ,..
The crescendo.?…Hello.
Finn x
I like that. Maybe I will write “the crescendo” sometime.
I shall look forward to your creation.
Wow maybe it’s weird to say this because I’m gay, but that was hot.
I love that, actually! Sex is just sex, sometimes.
Oh, it has begun…
yes! I am just beginning.
Pure sex.
Would hate to see the massacre once you’re done.
Oh, its vivid.
Wow
wow! powerful writing, your choice of words gives me a very vivid mind movie
Ha, thanks : )