Your ex-girlfriend opened the door,
half-dressed and hung-over,
blinking into the raging sunbeams,
which were bouncing off the melting snow mounds,
breasts leering through white-striped folds,
those expensive wares you buy for each other.
She mixes up cocktails all
haphazard and dog fur covered
and chatty.
I dust your pretend possessions,
and feeble cushions,
piled on top of each other like
a fur-lined feather orgy.
Do you sleep in every room
of your solo mansion
on purpose,
or do you do it because
it makes you feel
like someone else is there?
I dust the trophy room where
your son sleeps in fits of rage;
your ex-girlfriend pokes her head
through the door
to tell me he will
end up a serial killer.
She has showered
and shellacked herself,
but she was prettier
half-asleep,
and makeup-less,
hair a mess,
like a fluorescent
phantom.
She talks about her new
snow-globe apartment,
and I help her pack
eighteen pairs of shoes.
They look like dollar signs.
“I am a kind soul,” she told me.
And what she meant to say is that
you are not.
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I am honored, thank you so very much.
thank you very much you deserve that award more than me
Oh, no, no. We are all deserving.
but I am sure you and one person is there like you she is Shackled and Crowned you both are fantastic. great
Fascinating from start to finish.
Thank you : )
Shrinks aren’t cheap but the ability to convey as you have – Priceless! Thanks for stopping by and liking my poem, in so doing I have been given the gift of your words. Thank you!
That is so sweet, thank you very much! Your poem was so lovely.
Thank you, I am so grateful & happy to experience such a love as this.
You are nuts good at this. Last line is impeccable.
Thank you, that’s so sweet.
Intense and detailed, not a word wasted!
i love that, thank you.
Ugh. I feel like this
oh, sorry!
No, you’re not
if you say so
Thank you for the ‘likes’ on my page that brought me to your works. Very nice, I look forward to finding more gems as I return….
thank you so much! your work is so lovely.
A lot of WOW here- I agree, excellent! Love that shoes are like dollar signs, and fluorescent phantom. Beautiful- and kind of punches the heart.
Punches the heart. I like that. Thank you so very much.
Wow!
thanks : )
Oh wow!
: )
This is wonderful. Great job on this, again.
Thank you!
“but she was prettier
half-asleep”
-so telling of the human condition and that aspect we want to ignore. Lovely read. Thanks.
thank you so much
Stellar.
glad you liked!
I love this piece…
“I am a kind soul,” she told me.
And what she meant to say is that
you are not.”
…say that!!
thank you so much.
Beauty of words and ugliness of vision collide in a dialectic synthesis of incredible poetry. Definitely feeling this one. 🙂
wow, thank you.
You are my current muse.
Wow, that is so lovely of you. I’ll try not to let you down.
As long as you keep using your voice, you won’t let anyone down.
thank you.
“I AM a kind person.” I wonder who she was trying to convince? Great poem!
right?
Very, very nice! Your ability to paint picture carries your beautiful words in an explosive way! Loved it!
thank you so much!
Just when I feel words are inadequate you prove me wrong, thank you
: ) Sometimes the blank page is the devil in disguise. Your poetry takes me on wild rides of the mind, truly inspirational. There are many places we don’t want to be taken, but must. What poets inspire you?
All of them : ) Emily Dickinson, George MacDonald, Poe, Donne, Joanna Newsom…oh there are too many. Thank you for your sweet comments.
Damn… Very pretty, and a wicked burn. Well done, ma’dam
thanks!
Your words are a wonder-ful palette…you do indeed take us there – even though we’d probably rather not go there. 🙂
Yes, probably not 😉
Oh, yes you are, dear! 😉
: )
Wow, once again, so many great lines and images, well-crafted into a very visual and emotional portrait. The tone you manage to portray, both of your own voice (unspoken) and of the ex-girlfriend’s communicates extremely well in this poem. It is an experience, not just words.
thank you so much, that really means a lot to me.
A shiny veneer
of wealth to hide
the loveless life
that rots inside
Great imagery, I felt like I was actually there!
oh, i’m sorry 😉
For what?
taking you there (see winky face)
Ohh haha, Im on my phone and emoticons don’t show up on the WP app so I didn’t see the windy face! I get you know
Ohh, okay, I will spell them out now for you! Or just forego sarcasm all together!
No no, the sarcasm must stay I insist! Even without the emoji I had a feeling you were being sarcastic but I didn’t want to assume that just in case you weren’t.
Haha, yeah, sarcasm and assumptions all together could be disastrous.
Oh believe me I’ve made that mistake enough times to know better!
No mistakes here, at any rate. Say anything you like : )
Same goes for you, I never get offended or take things personally!
Uh oh, never tell a poet that (winkyface)
Hahaha! Oh well, its too late to take it back so I guess I will just have to brace myself huh?!!
(devilface)
(tongue sticking out)
“Do you sleep in every room
of your solo mansion
on purpose,
or do you do it because
it makes you feel
like someone else is there?”
Perfect.
thank you so much
Your commandment of words is beautiful and so inspirational, This why I love poetry. Finn x,
That is the nicest thing ever. Thank you.
I wish I could write like you…
No! Write like YOU forever.